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Maybe that was you
(hit the concrete hard
kiss it deep)
And you walked along (it struck you)
And you caught my eye
(and you knew I saw it coming).

Or maybe it was you
up there
(does it hurt so badly,
baby,
broken)
So that the pump
of rocking motion
Mocked and mimicked
reaching skyward (opened up)
possibilities
(your face)


To see the way things could have been, i have to turn
and look down the way you came
(it’s snowing now, you’d like the feeling)
past the
hit and the
glare and the
fact that you’re
lying there

and who were you again?
(what makes you think you’re)
done with the waiting for this.
(Baby, I’m gone.)



breathe
breathe
breathebreathebreathebreathe     breathe                    breathe
breathe                      breathe

breathe









breathe
©2007-2009 ~Lhachwen
:iconlhachwen:

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I failed English last year and ended up in this really interesting summer school course at a school not my own. The teacher for the second half of it was this young guy, enthusiatic, who tried everything he could to get this class of losers engaged. I wish I could say it was a success, and there's a movie coming out. Anyway, I liked him a lot, and one day we were discussing something and he offered extra credit for a poem about a hit-and-run. I don't remember why. I'd forgotten I started this.

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:iconbadkiwi:
I really like this a lot. How did you fail English with talent such as this?!

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A vision then appeared. It was Dumbledore, entombed in his cursed mummy armor, calling Harry from his Moon base.

"Harry, you must rock the fuck out."

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:iconlhachwen:
Thank you!

Um. One would be surprised at how many years of English I've managed to fail/barely scrape by in. I have the attention span of a delusional gnat. And I'm not very good at giving teachers what they want.

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"Why, little is as beautiful as sweet, sweet death! This message brought to you by the Death Council."
:iconrueyeet:
Your teachers were unimaginative gits, obviously.

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Blades will bleed! Shields will shatter! And I will jump around my living room like a moron! Wiiiiiiii!
:iconlinuxphreak:
definitely unimaginative gits

and i like it very mcuh. glad your attention span strecthes to finishing this

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For all you good people in the midwest, sorry we said fuck so much.
:iconlhachwen:
Though this is Crow's fault, "gitface" is rapidly becoming my new favorite insult.

Thank you. The attention thing like weird words.

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"Why, little is as beautiful as sweet, sweet death! This message brought to you by the Death Council."
:iconlhachwen:
I love my current teacher dearly, but he defined "harbinger" incorrectly to the class. I soldier on.

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"Why, little is as beautiful as sweet, sweet death! This message brought to you by the Death Council."
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:iconlinuxphreak:
gitface is a good word... however it applies to those who take part in one of my favorite sprts...

nit picking

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For all you good people in the midwest, sorry we said fuck so much.
:iconrueyeet:
The word "harbringer" is always paired with "OF DOOM" in my head, which kinda helps me remember what it means.

Of course, there's a whole lotta other things that "OF DOOM" goes with, so maybe that's not the best method. :D

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Blades will bleed! Shields will shatter! And I will jump around my living room like a moron! Wiiiiiiii!

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